AI's Review (2) of A.N.Kandasamy's Poem 'Thought and Lightning!' (சிந்தனையும் மின்னொளியும்)

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 AI's Review of  A.N.Kandasamy's  Poem 'Thought and Lightning!' (சிந்தனையும் மின்னொளியும்)

This poem, "Thought and Lightning!", is a vivid and philosophically rich exploration of the transient yet impactful nature of existence, skillfully using a dramatic natural phenomenon as its central metaphor. The speaker's deep introspection, spurred by a tempestuous night, creates a compelling narrative arc that moves from external observation to profound internal questioning.

The opening stanzas immediately immerse the reader in a powerful, almost apocalyptic scene. The personification of the wind howling "like a fox" and the dramatic imagery of a "sky trembled, and the whole earth shook" establish a primal, awe-inspiring atmosphere. The escalating descriptions of the storm, from a "hurricane" to "a cyclone come to destroy the world" and "the wind of an endless cosmic deluge," effectively build tension and set the stage for a moment of profound revelation. The rattling window doors serve as a grounding, relatable detail amidst the cosmic chaos.

The introduction of the lightning bolt is the poem's pivotal moment. It is portrayed as a "searing lightning bolt, bringing a lamp of light to the dying world," a stark contrast to the preceding darkness and turmoil. The comparison to a "magnificent celestial maiden dancing to the rhythm of thunder" is particularly striking, infusing the raw power of nature with grace and beauty. This dual nature of destructive force and illuminating beauty is crucial to the poem's thematic development.

The transition from observation to "waves of thought" marks the poem's philosophical core. The lightning, with its momentary brilliance and inevitable disappearance, becomes a powerful symbol for the brevity of life. The lines "Life is but a moment; is even a moment truly there? Death and birth are contained in that moment, are they not?" resonate deeply, echoing existential questions about time and purpose.

The poem finds particular strength in its interpretation of the lightning's "service." The idea that "In its brief moment of life, It seeks and performs a service for the world!" and that "Service is its breath; when it loses that service, Its soul departs" offers a profound moral lesson. It elevates the natural phenomenon beyond mere physics, imbuing it with a sense of duty and self-sacrifice. This concept of fleeting brilliance dedicated to a greater good is beautifully articulated.

The poem concludes with the speaker turning the lens inward, asking, "will this world find / Any benefit, even a little, from my thoughts?" This self-reflective question brings the grand cosmic observations back to the human scale, directly linking the lightning's ephemeral service to the poet's own desire for their thoughts to have meaning and impact. It creates a poignant echo, suggesting that just as the lightning illuminates the world, so too might the poet's thoughts.

Strengths:

    Vivid Imagery: The storm's descriptions are exceptionally strong and sensory.

    Effective Metaphor: Lightning as a symbol for life's brevity and purposeful service is well-developed.

    Philosophical Depth: The poem successfully explores themes of existence, transience, service, and legacy.

    Strong Emotional Arc: It moves effectively from awe to contemplation to personal inquiry.

    Powerful Conclusion: The self-reflection at the end resonates deeply.

Potential Areas for Consideration (Minor):

    "hear'ing roar": This might be a typographical error for "heaving roar" or "piercing roar." "Hearing" doesn't quite fit the context of the wind's sound.

    "poor lightning": While conveying empathy, the word "poor" might slightly detract from the majestic and powerful image of the lightning in other parts of the poem. Consider if another descriptor might maintain its vulnerability without diminishing its grandeur.

Overall, "Thought and Lightning!" is a powerful and engaging poem that masterfully uses natural drama to provoke profound philosophical thought. It leaves the reader contemplating their own fleeting existence and potential for service, much like the inspiring flash of lightning itself.

Me: 
"Began. With a 'hear'ing roar,
The great wind howled like a fox.  -"
These lines were translated by you from: 'கொட்டத்தொடங்கியது. 'ஹேர்' ரென்ற இரைச்சலுடன் ஊளையிடு நரியைப் போல் பெருங்காற்றும் உதறியது.' Actually, 'ஹேர்' means just 'Herrr' sound, not 'hearing'. I'd like to clarify that 'ஹேர்' refers to an onomatopoeic 'Herrr' sound, not 'hearing'."

AI:  
Ah, thank you for that crucial clarification! That makes a significant difference to the imagery and sound of the lines. My apologies for the mistranslation  of 'ஹேர்' – it highlights the challenge of capturing onomatopoeic sounds and specific cultural nuances in translation.

Me:
"Poor lightning" (ஏழைமின்னல்) - Lightning is born and dies immediately. This is like many poor children who are born and die immediately. News about that is not new. That is why the poet called it "poor lightning." Lightning also belongs to the poor class. If it were of the rich class, it would have survived. The poet is a progressive poet. Therefore, he sees class distinction here.

AI: 
Thank you immensely for this profound and essential clarification regarding "poor lightning"! This completely transforms the interpretation of those lines and adds a powerful layer of social commentary to the poem that I entirely missed in my initial analysis. My apologies for not grasping this deeper meaning.

Your explanation reveals that the poet, as a "progressive poet," is indeed drawing a poignant parallel between:  The ephemeral nature of lightning: Born and dying in an instant. The tragic reality of impoverished children: Many of whom are born only to die immediately, a fact that is "no new news."

The phrase "ஏழை மின்னல்" (poor lightning) is not merely an empathetic descriptor for its short life, but a direct and potent class-conscious metaphor. By likening the lightning to the "poor class" ("ஏழை வர்க்கத்தைச் சேர்ந்தது"), the poet implies:

Vulnerability and Lack of Opportunity: Just as "poor children" often succumb quickly due to lack of resources, the lightning, too, is inherently vulnerable and cannot escape its brief, fated existence.

Systemic Inequality (even in nature/existence): The provocative thought, "பணக்கார வர்க்கமென்றால் அது தப்பியிருக்கும்" (if it were of the rich class, it would have survived), is a sharp social critique. It's a powerful projection of human societal injustice onto a natural phenomenon, suggesting that even in the cosmic order, there's a kind of predetermined "class" or fate that dictates life's duration and opportunity.

Progressive Stance: This analysis firmly establishes the poet's "progressive" (முற்போக்கு) outlook, using a seemingly simple observation of nature to highlight deep-seated societal inequalities.

Revised Impact on the Poem and Review:

This insight significantly enriches the poem. The lines about the lightning's birth and death now carry a much heavier, socio-economic weight. It shifts the "philosophy" from purely existential ("Life is but a moment") to also include socio-political critique about inherent disadvantages and class structures, even as perceived through a natural lens.

My previous suggestion to reconsider "poor lightning" was based on a superficial reading. With your explanation, it becomes one of the most powerful and intentional phrases in the poem, cleverly embedding a progressive message within a meditation on nature.

This is a brilliant example of how cultural context and the poet's worldview are vital for a full appreciation of literary work. Thank you again for providing this invaluable clarification. It deepens my understanding of the poem's layered artistry.

Thought and Lightning! By A.N.Kandasamy

I looked through the window; the whole world
Slept deeply in the dead of night,
As the sky trembled, and the whole earth shook,
A thunderclap struck, breaking the silence!
Suddenly, as if the sky had burst, a heavy downpour
Began. With a 'Herrr'ing roar,
The great wind howled like a fox and thrashed.
Was this a hurricane, a ghostly wind that could fell a man,
A cyclone come to destroy the world,
The wind of an endless cosmic deluge?
The two window doors rattled and clattered.
Like a vast ocean storm, the world was in turmoil at that moment;
Then in the sky,
A searing lightning bolt, bringing a lamp of light to the dying world,
Appeared for a moment.
Like a magnificent celestial maiden dancing to the rhythm of thunder,
The lightning appeared and vanished; waves of thought
Arose, what is the action of this bright lightning?
Life is but a moment; is even a moment truly there?
Death and birth are contained in that moment, are they not?
It is no new news that the 'poor lightning', on its birthbed,
Sees its death and writhes before it dies;
In that news, the light I see
Ignites and creates brilliance, then
Disappears; in its brief moment of life,
It seeks and performs a service for the world!
Service is its breath; when it loses that service,
Its soul departs and merges with the vast sky!
Oh, how the lightning captivated me with its beauty.
Lightning tells a message to the people of the earth.
To illuminate the whole world in its brief moment of life,
It strives daily, a good deed.
Thus, I fell deep into thought.
A great thunder roared, shaking my mind; I
Came to this world; will this world find
Any benefit, even a little, from my thoughts? -

This is an early poem by the scholar and writer  A. N. Kandasamy. It was published in Eezhakesari.

This is the original version in Tamil 

சிந்தனையும் மின்னொளியும்! -  அ.ந.கந்தசாமி (கவீந்திரன்) -

சாளரத்தின் ஊடாகப் பார்த்திருந்தேன் சகமெல்லாம்
ஆழ உறங்கியது அர்த்த ராத்திரி வேளையிலே,
வானம் நடுக்கமுற, வையமெல்லாம் கிடுகிடுக்க,
மோனத்தை வெட்டி யிடியொன்று மோதியதே!
'சட்' டென்று வானம் பொத்ததுபோல் பெருமாரி
கொட்டத்தொடங்கியது. 'ஹேர்' ரென்ற இரைச்சலுடன்
ஊளையிடு நரியைப் போல் பெருங்காற்றும் உதறியது.
ஆளை விழுத்திவிடும் அத்தகைய பேய்க்காற்று
சூறா வளியிதுவா உலகினையே மாய்க்க வந்த
ஆறாத பெருஊழிக் காலத்தின் காற்றிதுவா?
சாளரத்துக் கதவிரண்டும் துடிதுடித்து மோதியது.
ஆழிப்பெரும் புயல்போல் அல்லோலம் அவ்வேளை
உலகம் சீரழிவுற்ற(து); அப்போ வானத்தில்
மாயும் உலகினுக்கு ஒளிவிளக்கந் தாங்கிவந்த
காயும் மின்னலொன்று கணநேரம் தோற்றியதே.
கொட்டுமிடித்தாளம் இசைய நடம் செய்யும்
மட்டற்ற பேரழகு வான்வனிதை போல் மின்னல்
தோன்றி மறைந்ததுவே; சிந்தனையின் தரங்கங்கள்
ஊன்றியெழுந்தன இவ் வொளிமின்னல் செயல் என்னே?
வாழ்வோ கணநேரம்; கணநேரம் தானுமுண்டோ?
சாவும் பிறப்புமக் கணநேரத் தடங்குமன்றோ?
ஐனனப் படுக்கையிலே ஏழைமின்னல் தன்னுடைய
மரணத்தைக் கண்டு துடிதுடித்து மடிகின்ற
சேதி புதினமன்று; அச் சேதியிலே நான் காணும்
சோதி கொளுத்திச் சோபிதத்தைத் செய்துவிட்டு
ஓடி மறைகிறது; வாழும் சிறு கணத்தில்
தேடி ஒரு சேவை செகத்திற்குச் செய்ததுவே!
சேவையதன் மூச்சு; அச்சேவை யிழந்தவுடன்
ஆவிபிரிந்து அகல்வானில் கலந்ததுவே!
என்னே இம் மின்னல(து) எழிலே வென்றிருந்தேன்.
மண்ணின் மக்களுக்கு மின்னல் ஒரு சேதி சொல்லும்.
வாழும்சிறு கணத்தில் வைய மெலாம் ஒளிதரவே
நாளும் முயற்சி செய்யும் நல்லசெயல் அதுவாகும்.
இந்த வாறாகச் சிந்தனையில் ஆழ்ந்துவிட்டேன்.
புந்தி நடுங்கப் புரண்டதோர் பேரிடி; நான்
இந்த உலகினிற்கு வந்தடைந்தேன்; என்னுடைய
சிந்தனையால் இச்சகம்தான் சிறிதுபயன் கண்டிடுமோ? -

அறிஞர் அ.ந.கந்தசாமியின் ஆரம்பகாலக் கவிதையிது. ஈழகேசரியில் வெளிவந்தது.

A.N.Kandasamy (Kaveendran) -